Chapter 9 project changes

When thinking back on my Rhetoric project, there are changes that could have been made both at the surface and structural level. At the surface level, I feel as if my text was a bit repetitive when I did add it and it would have been more convincing to add more word variety throughout the project. Going along with this, I definitely should have added more explanation for the data that was shown in the project to give the audience a better understanding of what they were looking at rather than making them interpret the graph in twelve or thirteen seconds. Another surface change that could have been made is adding another song or choosing a song that people know and recognize because although with my project it may not have made too much of a difference, there could have been songs that fit the mood of the message being portrayed to the audience. Some structural changes that I could have made is to give more of a flow into the Youtube video that was added. The video is somewhat of a slide show with movement as well, so it goes along with what I created; but if I created a slide to set the scene for the audience of the mood switch that was about to happen with the video then that could have been very effective. Structurally, the graphs and data could have been portrayed as text then sourced at the end for better clarity. I could have also added a voiceover for deeper explanation for the audience. I do not feel as if the length of my project is an issue because I did not want it to be too long to where the audience wouldn’t be interested. The final thing that I could have change structurally is to add more actual videos of people and examples of this issue effecting schools as well as people. This could have been an interview or simply a cinematic shot portraying what differences funding does.