For this assignment, I noticed a few things in light of reading Chapter 9:Revising Your Texts. Firstly, I would like to address my audience in a different way. I believe I did a good job at appealing to their emotions, especially with the imagery I used with the polar bears and glaciers. However that being said, I do not believe I gave my audience a clear enough objective after watching the video. For example, only till the very end do I inform my audience to “contact their state representative” to “phase out non-electric cars by 2050”. This directive is very general for an audience to administer considering most people do not contact their representatives or even know who they are.
Moreover, the majority of my video was based upon determining the current issue(global warming) and providing a solution(electric cars). However, I did not focus on the most important part which is my audience. I believe I should have made it more clear that it is their responsibility to follow through with the solution and make the switch to electric vehicles. I believe if I made this more apparent, my video would become much more powerful and efficient at achieving the results I desire.
Finally, I believe that my video would become a much more powerful argument if I included more facts about global warming and why United States citizens should press for phasing out non-electric vehicles by 2050. In my video, I included few facts, and the majority of text was concerned with appealing to my audiences emotions. While this is very important for developing an argument, I believe including facts would make my video even better. All in all however, I think the video did provide a strong argument and I think that with my proposed changes, it could potentially make a difference.
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